Over the last years, there has been an ongoing debate over the disappearance of disappearing the printed newspapers or books in the future. Some people argue that everything to read can be found on the Internet without paying in the future, so printed books will disappear. However, in my opinion, I partially disagree with this statement. I believe that printed writings will still be popular for audience.
On the one hand, the development of smartphones makes people to be familiar to do something on online. Today, most of people use their using a own smartphone for reading, studying, writing and so on, even children and some elderly people. As time goes, people getting older will be familiar to use smartphones, so they will feel comfortable to read everything on the Internet. In fact, study conducted by the US psychologists shows that more and more people read news articles and books on online these days. The youth people who will be next generation mostly using a smartphone to read books on online. (얘는 밑에서 말씀드리겠습니다.) Thus, it seems that printed books are unnecessary in the future.
Nevertheless, printed newspapers or books will still be popular in the future. To begin with, printed books are still popular for some people. For example, many book collectors exist until now, and they value to a printed book more than an not a online one. They feel cozy when they read a book, newspaper or other writings. They say says that it is impossible to feel this feeling by reading on online. Secondly, to read something without paying is impossible. This is because writing is also other people’s (author) property, so people who want to read it should pay for reading. For instance, if people who read other’s work even a newspaper did not pay no matter whether they read on online or printed writing, it is author’s property. (여기는 어떤 의미로 적어주셨나요? 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다.)
In conclusion, it is apparent that people are usually familiar to read something on the Internet online thanks to the improvement of smartphones. However, printed writings will still be demandable for people who feel cozy when they read a printed books in the future.
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