Your Answer ▼ People usually have divided views on the
impact of parents and teachers on children’s knowledgeable and social improvement by at school or home.
Some people think that the actual influence of the parents is more important
than that of a school. However, l agree with the idea that school life has a more significant
role in upgrading of the behaviors of children for two reasons. (서론은 대폭 수정이 필요한데, 이에 대해서는 본론 두 번째 문단과 더불어 총평에서 설명드릴게요.)
First of all, teachers can deliver the necessary
knowledge to young people in school, and they can teach some subjects for student
to overcome difficulty problems in life. Moreover, It it is generally thought that
children also like to learn from teacher than their parents. (이에 대한 근거를 서술해주셔야 합니다.) For example, young
boys (특정 성별만을 지칭해서는 안 됩니다.) acquire good ideas and intellectual abilities ability from mathematics, science,
history, English and so on.
Another main reason is that childhood sociality can be
formed with similar people in school. Children instinctively want to go to
school to come along with their friends, when they are 7 or 8year old, and this
is because that above age is the appropriate time to have a relation with some
people. Commonly, young boys play various activities with their friends in
class, and also, after school, they do some sports games such as soccer,
basketball and baseball in playground. Those experiences help children to
advance their abilities in life. (여기에 대해서는 총평에서 말씀드리겠습니다.)
To
conclude, young boys (여기도 마찬가지이고요.) can acquire a lot of intellectual ideas from their
teachers in school, and playing something with friends can help them to have a
greater social relations with others, not to mention in their life. For these
reasons, l firmly agree that school life enhances the intellectual and social
ability of young man (여기도 그렇습니다.). |