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Discuss the possible causes for the worldwide increase in crime and violence. What has been the effect of these adverse trends on society? | |
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Violent crimes facing humanity have dramatically increased in the last few decades. Crime is activities that involve breaking the law such as stealing someone’s property. Some argue that the sources of unlawful actions come from mass media and parents. Even though the causes are not perfectly defined, it is inevitable for our society to be affected itself. In this essay will discuss a few possible causes of crime and then it will be critically evaluated what effects have led to on our community.
One of main sources which can seriously affect human not to obey the law is violent mass media. Many are exposed by violent shows such as movies, music and games. Some of them sometimes make it illegal to follow violent crime when they were impressive on any highlight of illegal action. However, some media scientists argue those who have seen the illegal actions by mass media can protect same things in advance by educating themselves through the media.
Another cause is from their parents. Family is a fundamental group in our society and people study firstly how to socialize with others and what rules they should follow in their own sweet home. In most cases, children who were loved from their family do obey the standard in the society and otherwise they may disobey the law. On the other hand, some argue that those who were taken too much love from their family can easily be selfish. And then as they are growing up, they may take illegal actions to make it themselves whatever they want.
These crime and violence in the world have led to many baneful effects on the world. Sometimes horrible murders are happen, unfortunately. In addition, it gives rise to the untruthful world on which people cannot believe in others. It is vital to make our community safe and truthful each other whatever the solutions of increasing the number of crime are. | |
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