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Nowadays,
some people think that people should study at university or college is more helped helpful to get a successful career due to because many enterprises want to hire the people who
graduated university or college. However, others consist that people should get
a job straight after school for practical technical (관련 동사를 넣어서 완성시켜주세요~). In this regard, this essay
will discuss both opinions.
The
main reasons that studying at university or college is better than getting a
job after school directly is because most of the enterprises hope to seek the people
who have studied professionally. because This is due to the fact that, most of the enterprises (위에 이미 같은 표현이 있으므로 수정해주세요~) target to sell
their products to many countries. Therefore, they want not only can speak
varied languages (여기에 대해서는 앞 문장의 연장선에서 사용이 가능합니다. 그러나 뒤에 이어지는 전공과는 어떠한 연관이 있는지 전혀 드러나있지 않고요. 대학 학위와 많은 나라에서 물건을 판매하는 것이 어떻게 연관되는지 보여주세요~) but also have studied particular major at university or
college. According to the BBC in 2018, eighty percent of the people who work in
major companies graduated from university or college. (이러한 통계제시는 아무런 의미가 없습니다~더 구체적인 설명을 하지 않을 거면 그냥 지우는 게 오히려 역효과의 위험을 제거하기 때문에 나아요.)
One
the other hand, others insist that acquiring realistic technics through get a
job directly without helping from school (여기는 through 를 기준으로 앞뒤가 바뀌었죠. 인과관계가 뒤바뀌었습니다.) is more important for major companies
because to be expert is significant to have many experiences (마찬가지로 앞뒤가 바뀌었습니다.). Also, there are
many high schools which offer knowledges of job skills in the world so a lot of
students are able to learn what they want to be. Therefore, it will be an enormous
opportunity for students not only can study a variety of job skills (여기는 어떤 의미로 적어주셨나요? 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다.) but also
save the money for enrolling university or college.
In
conclusion, studying at university or college is best choice to have a
successful career that can work in global companies. However, I think that getting
a job after school is more important because people can have varied experience. (여기는 두 문장이 충돌합니다. 첫 문장에서 best choice 가 있다고 하셨는데 그 뒤에 더 중요한 게 있다는 것은 모순이겠죠.)
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