Your Answer ▼ It is a common belife (파란 부분은 전부 철자 오류가 있는 단어들이므로 꼭 직접 수정해주세요!) that art and music classes should not be mandatory at school. This is because Because, it is not directly related to educational achivements. However, I firmly believe that these classes should be mondatory at school because it gives opportunities for students to think about their talant and dream.
To begin with, students can develop their creativity as they recive these classes (새로운 문단이 시작되었으므로, 이 classes 가 정확히 어떤 걸 의미하는지 다시 한번 상기시켜주세요.). In these classse students listen to famous songs and paint many things. These are activities give montivations of ideas to students and also stimulate their emontions of students. For example, songwriters make new songs regularly. They always listen to the music and come up with new ideas. I think what they do is inspiration. It is also a kind of creativity. (학교 수업과의 연관성을 보여주세요.)
On top of that., these classes (여기도 윗 문단과 마찬가지입니다.) create opportunities for students to relieve stress. Students should have to study gaing knowledges such as mathmatics and science for six hours everyday. These repeatitive educations make students to feel bored and gain have a tons of stress. However, music and art can help refresh their emotions Music and art can be their emotions to refresh. For isntance, hospitals take music and art therapy for PTSD (posttraumatic stress disorder) patients to reduce stress. These treatments make patients to express their emotions easily and also effect to reduce stess. (마찬가지로 단순히 음악, 미술 자체의 장점에 대해서 어필해서는 안 되고, 이걸 학교 교육과 연관시킬 수 있는 사례를 적어주셔야 해요.)
To sum up, music and art classes hepl for students to foster creativity and release their stress. For these reasons, music and art classes are absolutely necessary.
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