Q) Raising household electricity fees is the most effective solution to the problems associated with power generation and environmental pollution.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
What other measures do you think might be effective in reducing the environmental pollution cause by power generation?
In
contemporary society, the issue of raising household electricity fees is being
commonly discussed because it seems like it will be a solution of environmental
pollution. However, it is more important to consider that whether this idea is an efficient
solution or not. I personally believe that it will not affect much on reducing
pollution.
To
begin with, increasing household electricity fees cannot be the most effective
solution because the share of household is little compared to that of
industrial electricity. The government provides electricity much cheaper to
conglomerates and factories than houses. For this reason, there are a massive
amount of industrial electricity wasting being wasted. Also, the absolute amount of total use
for industry is larger than for houses. According to a recent study, raising
industrial electricity fees will decrease the total amount of generation. As it can be seen a
result, household electricity will not influence on power generation and
pollution.
Instead, developing new technologies such as eco-friendly fuels and high mileage vehicles (7점 이상에서는 이런 것에 대해서도 더 구체적으로 설명할 수 있어야합니다.) would be more advantageous in terms of reducing environmental pollution. As technologies develop faster, a lot of developed countries that have interested in sustainable development are creating diverse ways to generate electricity instead of using fossil fuels. Thereby, this absolutely will decline the level of environmental pollution and be helpful to convey the importance of sustainability to the public.
In conclusion, it is a contentious issue of charging expensive fees for household electricity because it is unsure to be the most effective solution. In my opinion, the usage of houses does not account for massive portion so that it cannot be practically efficient. Rather, I suggest that developing new technologies for generation electricity with environmental-friendly ways can be a practical solution for our sustainable society.
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