Some people believe that governments should financially support for the construction of railways instead of roads. I firmly agree with this arguement and this essay will discuss the reasons.
There are two main reasons why I think governmont should take care of the railways more than road. First of all, more vehicles makes more negative effects, such as air polution and heavy traffic. The global wealth is getting higher, thus nowadays there is no one who does is no people who do not have his or her own vehicle. For instance, people in general have cars, and people in developing countries usually have scooters. Both personal transports make a ton of (구어라 대체해주시는 게 좋긴 합니다.) greenhouse gas and it is known as the main cause of global warming. Recently some nations tried to make people use public transportation, however people who already felt the convenience of personal transport do not follow the government’s advice.
Moving to the next reason, improving public transport is not only eco friendly, but also more valuable in financial way than constructing roads. petrol Petrol cost is unstabled due to some selfish countries, and trade expectation among countries are vague with same reasons. Some certain goods’ cost are getting more expensive and it influences all type of workforce, furthermore economy of nation. If government improve public transport such as railway, it would effectively prevent as more as citizens from global economic shock.
Somehow development of transportation would be continued, hence the government should spend money to public improvement for better environment, public order, and next generation. As long as the train serves as the feet of people, the Earth would be a the better place to live.
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+참고로, railway 는 public transport 와 동일시할 수 없습니다. 오히려 굳이 따지자면 대중교통은 road 쪽에 조금 더 가까워요. 지금 내용에 중요한 게 아니라 위에서 말씀드리지는 않았지만, 일단 알아는 두세요!