Everyone should stay in school until the age of eighteen. To what extent do you agree or disagree? |
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While many people believe that students must have choices to develop their unique abilities, others claim that the government must put the obligation to the students to study various subjects until being eighteen years old. I considered that put diversities in children’s lives by giving choices far outweigh staying in school compulsorily until being adults. Some people opine that school teaches students a variety of subjects what we should know in our lives, for instance, mother language, mathematics, arts, music, geology and so on. Many students might discover their hidden abilities from these classes, furthermore, those subjects are basic knowledge we need to have for living. If students were not educated in an obligatory way, they might not calculate the change after paying in a supermarket and would not even know that the earth is round. Another reason can be that students are able to be socialized by their classmates. Thus, by studying and doing exercises together in school, students are able to learn how to cooperate and take care of each other. On the other hand, there are countless advantages can be brought by developing students’ own strengths. Firstly, studying in school out of obligation, children might waste their valuable time and loss their opportunities can enhance their own ability. Every single student has different skills. For example, there is a wealth of young talents in music, learning foreign languages and some children have brilliant ideas for inventing new products. Secondly, School may force students to study more. As a result of mandatory education, loads of students who are depressed by the score of assessments according to the survey. When I was a secondary school student, I had to be at school 17 hours in a day but my parents encouraged me to spend more time in school to study harder than other students. It became a huge stress to me. To conclude, even though staying at school has lots of positive effects, students must be given the discretion to spend their valuable time to learn what they want and where they want to be before the age of eighteen.
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