2. Which of the following functions of smart phones most beneficial to students? (1) taking photos (2) listening to the music (3) recording lectures
I think that recording lectures is the most beneficial function to
students. First, It helps students earn a good grade. To be specific, students
can listen again to the part they do not understand while taking a course. And
recent studies show that repetitive learning is related to academic
achievement. (How does it relate to each other?) Second, students can take a course with less tension and really
concentrate on the contents of the course very well. For example, I always feel pressure
in class because I have to focus on whole contents whatever can set exam
questions. (Hard to understand) But after I started recording, it helped helps me forget about worries and
center on key content.
*Additional Comment:
채점기준 | 점수 | 첨삭 |
General Description | 2 | - 두 번째 주장과 예시의 연관성이 다소 미흡한 것으로 보이네요. 어떠한 우려를 잊게 해주는지에 대해서도 상세하게 접근하실 필요가 있습니다. |
Delivery | N/A | - Script 첨삭 |
Language Use | 2 | - the most beneficial function --> 다음 of smartphone을 붙여주셔야 합니다. - - whatever can set exam questions --> 어색한 문장구조입니다. 다시 재구성하여 언급하여 주세요. - it helps me forget --> 이미 일어난 과거의 일이므로 helped로 바꾸어주시는 것이 적절합니다. |
Topic Development | 2 | - repetitive learning is related to academic achievement --> 가 어떻게 첫 번째 연관이 되는지 충분히 설명하여 주세요.예를 들어 memorize better이라는 측면을 부각시켜주시면 더 좋을 것 같네요. |
Score | N/A |