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라이팅 136p 예요!
In the reading passage there is ample support for the author’s claim that the subsidies for farmers will give lots of benefits. However, the professor in the lecture gives several reasons as a rebuttal to the author’s point.
First, the professor contends that the subsidies would not stabilize food production. In recent 5 years when subsidies are offering to the farmers, just the crop which can use as energy, such as corn, are produced more, which means that food production didn’t be affected by subsidies. This casts doubt on the reading passage’s claim that since the subsidies decrease the risk of food production, farmers would produce more food and the production would be stabilized.
Next, the professor intends that the price of food would not be low. The subsidies are just for some crops, such as corn and soy, so production of vegetables which is not the subject of subsidies will be decreased and the price of vegetables will be expensive. This counters the reading passage’s assertion that the subsidies offset the cost of food production, so the prices will be reduced.
Finally, the professor argues that poverty in rural areas could not be solved by the subsidies. In these days, farmers try to cultivate their farms automatically through equipments. Thus, only the owner of farm can get the benefits of subsidies and the workers or the communities would not. This refutes the reading passage’s suggestion that if the farmers get the subsidies, they would cultivate more land and hire more workers, hence the poverty in the area will be alleviated.