■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to take history courses. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. |
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▶ Your Answer : Some people say that students don't have to study history courses. They think learning now is more important than learning history. However, in my opinion, people get valuable things by studying history. Let me explain why I think this way. To begin with, people can learn a lot of things from the past. In the past, there are diverse situations and problems similar to now. For example, in this year, animal disease emerge in farm at Incheon. It can be killed many animal and damaged to human society, but a group of vet use a method from the past. Had it not been for the method from the past, people would not been able to solve the this problem. Second, people can't repeat problem that happen in the past to reflect on the problem. I will give an example of two sport team to explain my point. A team was not study their history about mistake in last game. Unlike A team, B team always study their mistake in last game, and try to improve their problem. To conclude, B team was the best team in the world. In this regard, I think all students should be required to take history courses not to repeat the problem.
우선 things와 같은 모호한 단어 사용은 지양하는 게 좋습니다. 예시 적기 전에 주장에 대한 supporting detail이 조금 더 자세하게 나와야 주장이 더 설득력있게 다가옵니다. conclusion에 주장 설명이 조금 더 자세하게 나와야 주장 마무리가 더 자연스럽게 이어집니다. 문장이 아주 기본적인 편입니다. 제 생각에는 영작 연습과 어휘 공부 병행되면 좋을 것 같습니다 (문장은 많이 쓰면 쓸 수록 좋습니다) |
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처음으로 써보는 라이팅입니다. 부족한 점이 많습니다.. 잘 부탁드립니다..!