■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : people can deal with the problem on their own, so the goverment assistance isn't necessary. |
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▶ Your Answer : Obiviously, solving own's problem plays a
significant role in many people's lives where they work or play. Some people
say that the government should help people to solve individual problems while
others do not. If I were asked to choose that I would like to say that people
can dealt with problem on their own. There are several reaons as follows.
To begin with, solving problem by one's
ablility bring a better result in people's lives. To solve problems by
themselves people need to be responsible and diligent . When such obligation
fullfied, it brings a better result.
For example, when my sister in high shool, she often felt depressed while
thinking her life became exhaused rountine and hard to find job. Also it was
too difficult to make friends she could realy on. Fortunity, she was able to
get over that problems by seeking advice and looking for infomation. She tried
to spending time with classmates who had similar problems about finding job.
While some of her classmate
waited the goverment policy about the
increasing job position. She tried to helping each other, she realized her
responsibilty and diligent help her work better, while lazy and irresponsibilty
cound have negative affect on others. Without this experience that finding her
problem by herselves, she would not solve the problem.
Also, the government had to use their funds
and assist not people's problems but improtant things for everyone. The
governmentd money is made up of the people's taxes this
means that the government should mention
where their money is used. For example, in the last year, some people protest
the government new policy that using texas at helping personal problems. Many
people did not support that because they are lot of important matter more than
that. That made peole lose their trust for the government.
I strongly belive that people can deal wih
their own probles. The government should not help them for the reasons as I
mentined. The importance of the ablitity of the people is not overestimated.
spelling오류가 있다는 것은 proof reading을 안 했다는 뜻입니다. 가장 기본적인 오류이기도 하니 절대 없도록 적어야 합니다. 문장 부호 빼먹은 부분이 꽤 있습니다. 작아보여도 없으면 주장 전달이 제대로 안 되는 경우가 있으니 주의해주세요 전체적으로 어휘가 조금 기볹거인 편입니다. 예상 가능한 범주 이내에서만 나오는 것 같아 조금 아쉬워요. (특히 연결사 조금 더 다양하게 연습하는 게 좋습니다) conclusion에서 주장 설명이 더 자세하게 나와야 합니다. as I mentioned라고 하는 것은 의미가 없습니다 |
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실제 시간안에 쓴 내용만 올려봅니다. 처음 하는거라 시간이 많이 부족해서 오타 검증은 못했네요 ㅜㅜ