▶ Your Answer : It becomes a controversial issue, whether developed countries should do financial assistance to undeveloped nations. Some argue that economic support can help solve the problem of backward countries. In my opinion, however, another approach have to be practiced, because monetary aid does not improve their countries' situation.
I certainly believe that financial aid do not make better the poor economic situation. there has to be other manner to support undeveloped nations instead of financial aid. (주제에 나온 거 다시 말하지 말고 바로 이유로 들어가는 것이 좋습니다) Undeveloped nations need to receive educational support such as quality education systems, facilities and materials for economic and political improvement. Education enables the citizens of poor nations to know not only their rights people to learn their rights and their potential as a human who has skilled and talent. This can further contribute significantly to economic development and political reform such as anti-corruption. In fact, many advanced countries and related international organizations such as the World Vision are providing educational support for countries in economic trouble these days. For instance, they teach practical agricultural technology, build a school and provide a great variety of educational reference. According to survey (출처 적어주는 것이 좋습니다) , this policy has substantial influences on people's lives in poverty-stricken nations.(정확하게 어떤 influence를 주었다는 것인지 설명이 필요합니다) Hence, educational access is far and away the best solution to lift out of poverty and fight against decay in the end.
In conclusion, I totally agree with the opinion that financial fund can not have solved under developed nations' poverty. Even though it is difficult to solve this complicated problem, in lieu of monetary assistance, educational and can be a viable help to poverty nations. survey를 적을 때는 최대한 신뢰가 가도록 적는 것이 중요합니다. 문장의 뜻을 이해할 수 없는 부분이 종종 보입니다. 문장을 적을 때 무조건 길게 적으려고 하지 말고 한문장씩 끊어서 문장 뜻 전달을 가장 우선시하면 좋을 것 같습니다. 어휘와 문장의 문맥과 맞지 않는 부분 있습니다. 어휘 정확한 뜻 외워야 합니다 |