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Many people struggle
to make a short break to read a book, believing it helps to understand the world.
It is well known what books give to (give to라는 어법은 존재하지 않습니다) us. It tells us utilitarian information and
lessons that hardly get through personal experience. However, I believe that
traveling around the world is more helpful
in comprehending the various people and the dynamic world despite the books’ advantages.
To begin with, trips cover what books are impossible to include. In the world, there is a lot of
value that could not easily be described in reading materials. For example, suppose
that you have read the reading material about a certain foreign culture. This may
intrigue you to search more about it, but the more books you read the more
curiosities would be brought about to you with the untangled vagueness. (정확하게 무슨 뜻으로 작성하신건지 이해가 안가요 need to rewrite) The
only way to appreciate it is through actual experience.
On top of that,
traveling is a more direct way to understand the world. For example, in the previous
time when the absolute king ruled the whole country, the authorities often wandered
the city where their citizens inhabited to get insights about the nation. Their
knowledge to govern the nation would have been limited if the ruler were just staying
in the palace and reading the books of the wises to get advice from it. The documents
that contain records about the series of the dynasty have revealed that all
the successful governor frequently took a trip to examine the world to talk with the public and experience what they had to go through.
To sum up, travel around the world helps you build a sense of the real world that is not
written on the books and figure out how it works. In this regard, I firmly
assure that traveling is a more efficient way of learning diverse mankind and society.
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