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Some people believe that one who is in trouble should get advice
from older people. However in my opinion, it helps to
get advice form from friends. There are two reasons; first, friends also experience the same troubles at
present. Second, one can relieve stress through getting advice form from friends.
Frist of all, dut due to the fact
that friends live in the same period and they
also have troubles like me, their advice could
help you when you are in trouble. Surely, older people also had experienced various
troubles when they are were our
age. However, the period that they lived in is not different form
from our society today.
For instance, when I was in high school, I was nervous about entering the
university. So, I talked to my father. But, he did not understand. The reason
was the change of the education system. I was in
trouble about the score about Chinese my Chinese
score. But, in his age, the chinese Chinese
had not been the was not a required
subject. Therefore, generation is important factors the difference in generations is an important factor.
Second, through talking about my trouble with my friends, it helps
relieve stress. Having the outlet for stress has a meaning in itself. People
nowadays have pressure not only physically but also mentally. It helps people
get back on track after talking to friends about one`s own trouble. For
example, when a day was chinese politics midterm in the university during the midterm period in my university years, I
was so concerned about the test. So, I talked about the contents of the lecture
with my friends who took the lecture with me. Through conversation with my
friends, I relieved nervous stress and it helped me remember
about the contents.
To sum up, I suggest that the fact that friends
liev live in same period with me and
through communication with friends, it helps relieve stress. In this regard, I
firmly hold that we need to get advice from friends.
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