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It'll be better If there isn't happened such problem. However, Unfortunately, world is where always suffer those problems. Although it is It's a good way to complain in person, I prefer to complain in writing. There are two reasons why I regard this way. In my opinion, I would suggest writing because iIt gives writers more time to think about it so that he/she can make more logical sentence than speaking face to face.
First of all, iIf some complainer writes the problems about product or poor service, they are able to have sufficient time to pose it. What I mean is that, some customers who are really upset and angry about the company's product is might have a hard time to speak everything which make him/her angry. So they need to arrange it clearly before complaining. More over, writing it can make them to alternate the words which something might going to gonna be troublesome or too much emotional. Also, complaining on the paper might be logical and generous. B because there is 's many time to fix and change it. It would help them write it without negative and angry emotion. So, iIt could more easily persuade people why the charger get angry. In addition, iIt would help to lessen hurting people who work in that company. This is because customer could be likely to generous and kind to those. For these reasons, complaining in writing is more easy and beneficial to that customers. It may bring more advantage than complaining in person. So, I prefer to pose the problem in writing words than in person.
Limited/ Fair (1-19) 서론 -줄 친 부분 불필요합니다. 또한, 본인의 감정이 드러나도록 쓰는 것은 좋지 않습니다. -축약형 지양해주시고 대소문자 지켜주세요. It's--> it is -파란 부분 he/she 에서 he or she 라고 해주시던가 he 라고 통용해주세요.
첫번째 본문 -파란부분 마찬가지로 him or her 혹은 him -gonna 같은 구어체 표현 지양해주세요. gonna--> going to -moreover 붙여씁니다. -왜 arrange clear before 이 좋은지 더 서술해주시고, 구체적인 예시도 들어주세요.
두번째 본문 -주어+동사 because 주어+동사 혹은 Because 주어+동사, 주어+동사로 써주세요. -축약형 지양해주세요. there's-->there is -연두색 부분 이해하기 어렵습니다. -대소문자 오류 -내용상 첫번째 본문의 연장선 같습니다. 상이한 이유와 예시와 설명을 들어주셔야 글의 설득력이 생깁니다.
결론 -complain (동사)가 아니라 complaining 동명사로 써주세요. -that 불필요합니다.
글자 수 300 미만입니다. 글자 수 미니멈 맞추지 못하면 감점됩니다. 내용도 뚜렷한 이유와 설명이 부족합니다. 첫번째와 두번째 본문의 차이점도 뚜렷하지 않습니다. 뚜렷한 이유와 설명, 그리고 구체적인 예시로 조직적이고 설득력있는 글쓰는 연습 해주세요.
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