▶ Your Answer :
Undoubtedly, the
communication plays a significant role in people’s lives in many of the places
where they play and work. Some people think that speaking skills are more
important than writing ones , while others do not. Both sides have their own
reasons to support their views. As far as I am concerned, I would say that it
is highly doubtful that speaking ability is more crucial than writing one.
There are two reasons as follows.
To begin with, thanks
to the advancement of technology, especially in SNS in modern days, people
should admit that the ability to write well is as important as ability to speak
well. When society was underdeveloped, many people used to meet others in
reality. However, as technology is coming closer and closer toward the cutting
edge, building relationship through SNS has become imperative. I will talk about
myself and my sister., I was only interested in meeting people offline so I thought that
it does not need to learn about how to write well. However, my sister enjoyed
writing a daily record and posted it on her SNS. Through it, she could meet a
variety of people around the world, naturally improving social skills and broadening perspectives toward the world as well. I
realized that it was my misjudgment and finally decided to enhance my writing skill.
On top of that, when
students are good at showing what they think through text, it will help
students improve their academic performances. In fact, normally almost every
assignment is paper, which means that it requires students to have nice writing
skill. Thus, when this skill is developed, students are likely to bring a
better result from school. For example, Seoul National University found a huge difference
between two groups of high school students in academic performance. One group
consisted of students who learn writing skill from private educational institutions
and the other group was made up of those who do not. What they found was
intriguing. They got to know that the former group tended to get higher score
than the latter. The main factor was that by developing writing method, they
could express their opinions more clearly. This implies that having a proper
skill to show their notions through text is a key to success, academically as
well as professionally.
To sum up, taking
the advent of technology and students’ academic achievement into consideration,
I firmly believe that writing skills and speaking one are equally vital factor
for people.
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