Whether studying along or with others is a prevalent topic undergoing simple debate among many students. Many different opinions and suggestions exist with regard to the topic. After reviewing the opinions from several perspectives, I personally agree to with the idea that studying without others is even better than other option for the following three reasons.
To begin with, my past experience become is a good reference point to make my own determination about the topic.to support my opinion. Actually, I have experienced an occasion similar to the topic mentioned above. Whenever an exam is upcoming, I have had to choose between two options, : studying alone or with others. I have tried both methods that I can surely assert that studying with friends or others is much more productive. This is because I can learn academically deficient challenging section from others when preparing for the test, definitely increasing academical academic efficiency.
Secondly, some views of experts give me an inspiration to select my option about the topic. According to the research conducted by experts working at Seoul National University in Korea, I in comparison to the case of studying alone, students who are studying in groups group studying has much higher concentration on their study studies due to the competitive atmosphere. Such a competitive circumstance atmosphere improves not only concentration of students but also the grades on the test. Affected by the result of the research, I strongly believe that studying with others is a lot more efficient.
Lastly, a philosophical proverb also helps helped me decide on my own opinion about the topic. The philosophical saying, helpful for learning realistic wisdom appropriately applied to the topic of today, is "we can live when gathering together." (노란색으로 highlight되있는 부분은 이해가 안가요. 다른 phrase로 바꾸는게 좋을 거 같아요.) I want to try to interpret the philosophical sentence from an academical academic perspective, resulting in the interpretation that gathering with others to study can spur improve academical academic ability abilities of students and create much more creative and inventive thoughts. Considering the meaning of the philosophical sentence, I can surely claim that studying with others is much better than other option.
In conclusion, I agree to with the idea that doing academical task with others is even better than doing it alone for some the reasons mentioned above. Thus, I recommend for all students or workers to do the jobs or assignments with others.
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