▶ Your Answer :Some people say that when
they regard a major selection, other factor such as information of magazines
and recommendation from famous person has a greater influence on our choices.
However, I have a different idea. I strongly believe that recommendation from
close friends greatly aeffect on their choice of major. There are several
reasons for these. People can trust in friends, talk with friends about major
carefully. Also, friends can distinguish between strength and weakness.
To begin with, people can have be had substantially effect on
their choice if a friend recommends their major because people can believe
friends. Trust can make it possible for people to carefully consider friends'
recommendation. In other words, because friends have gotten along with people,
they are willing to help people to decide their proper major. Friends will give
an advice to them sincerely. So, people can accept their frank advice. On the
other hand, since magazine, celebrities ate, information of internet are more likely
to convey false fact. In this factor, people cannot trust these.
Second, friends can make larger effect on choice of major
since they can be concerned about deliberate selection with people for a long
time. This means that people can have a conversation about the problem with
friends. In this process, friends and people can consider carefully about the
major and find a way to solve the problem. Through the long conversation,
people can eventually find optimal choice. For example, when I was a high school
student, I had to decide college major. I had a hard time in choosing e which major
is are appropriate. So, I talked with my best friend Tom. Eventually, he could
give assistance to me through the process to consider diverse aspects together.
Finally, friends can have more considerable influence on
people's choice in that they have known that people have various strength and
weakness. It is important to know about diverse characteristics because these
can lead people to fit in their aptitude. Observing people for a long time,
friends can find people's characteristics. Thus, they give information about
what kind of strength they have. For example, my father had a friend, Mike.
They spent time together for 10 years. Therefore, they knew about themselves
very well. At that time, my father needed to choose between math and history major. He
tried to ponder about the major, but he could not select this. However, thanks
to Mike, he could choose the optimal major for him.
To sum, I strongly think that friends can have make greatly
effect on people's decision of major because people can believe friends' advice
and have a conversation for long time, and friends know about their strength
and weakness.
Good (24) 서론 -affect :동사, effect: 명사
첫번째 본문 -have effect on 으로 써주세요. great, substantial 등의 형용사는 have 와 effect 사이에 넣어주세요. -끝에서 두번째 줄에서, since 빼주세요. since 주어+동사, 주어+동사 혹은 주어+동사, since 주어+동사 로 씁니다. -철자 오류
두번째 본문 -끝에서 세번째 줄에서, choose 원형을 쓰시려면 time to choose 로 to 부정사로 써주세고, in 은 choosing으로 써주세요. -단/복수 동사 유의 세번째 본문 -A 와 B 사이에서 고를때는 choose between A and B로 써주시면 의미 전달이 용이합니다. choose math and history라고 하면 둘다 선택했다는 의미로 통합니다.
본문 세개를 쓰셨는데, 본문 2개를 쓸 때보다 더 메리트가 있는 선택이였는지 모르겠습니다. 세 본문 다 이유가 다르긴 하지만 어느정도 비슷한 부분들이 많습니다. 또한, 문법 실수도 많습니다. 수고하셨습니다~~
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