▶ Your Answer :
There are some people who believe that
people cannot learn a lot more about a person by his friends. However, I
personally disagree with the statement above with the two subsequent reasons.
First, friends affect each other a lot. Second, friends share the same
interests. Firstly, people are affected a lot from by their friends a lot This is because people share a lot of time with their friends; ,
and this leads each other to have similar characteristics which shows the type of people. Let me
bring up my personal experience as an example. (Let 으로 시작하거나 명령형 문장인 경우 구어체이므로 사용을 지양해주세요) I have a group of friends who
became very close to me during my high school years. They were very active, and
I always hang out with them in the same classroom and even after school. In
fact, Previously, I was very timid, but I became much more active after I met them. (구체적으로 친구들과 어떤 활동/계기 등을 통해 active 해 졌는지 작성해줏세요) My teacher remembers me as an active girl.(주장을 뒷받침하는 내용이라고 보기엔 크게 상관 없는 문장입니다) If it hadn't had not (줄임말 아닌 문장 그대로 작성해주세요) been for my friends, I
could have been noticed as just a shy girl. Moreover, the same interests are shared
among friends. In other words, people become friends each other when there have some interests which are able to be shared. This develops (같은 관심사를 공유하기 때문에 이 관심사 자체가 그 그룹을 나타내는 특성이 될 수 있다 등 좀 더 논리적으로 자세하게 내용이 연결 될 수 있게 작성해주세요) characteristics of
people. According to the recent research done by the SHC Institute of sociology,
more than 80% of the groups of two respondents had the similar type of personality with their friends they chose to be close; according to these respondents, the person they chose shared same interests with each other for more than 20 years. Also, they had many
characteristics which were matching with each other, such as fashion styles, eating
habits, and so on. This clearly shows that sharing the same interests makes
friends similar. (이러한 관심사를 공유하는 것이 어떻게 비슷한 특성을 가질 수 있게 작용하는 지에 대한 설명 보충이 필요합니다)
In conclusion, people
can get information about a person from his friends since friends have a great effect on each other and share the same interests.
In this regard, I firmly believe that people can know much more about a person from
the type of friends that he has.
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
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PROGRESSION AND COHERENCE
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LANGUAGE USE
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GRAMMAR
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각 카테고리별 SCORE: LIMITED / FAIR / GOOD
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- 논리 내 구멍이 있는 경우가 종종 보입니다. - "어떠한 친구 그룹에 있다는 것은 그들이 공통된 관심사를 보유하고 있다는 뜻이고, 이 관심사의 공유는 그들의 특징으로 보여진다" 등 주제와 좀 더 직결적으로 연결된 이유를 작성해주세요. |