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There are different opinions regarding whether in order to know a country, visiting the museum is the best way to know a country. However I am convinced that going to the museum is not necessarily mosteffective way to understand a certain country. It means there are other methods giving merit to know the country well. In the following paragraph, I will explain the detailed and logical reasons over my opinion. To start with, because the museum is not an optimized way to understand the country easily, it is difficult to be recommended. Although it contains plenty of histories, simultaneously there are a lot of not uninteresting factors such as ancient tools. (It depends on people) Even going to the museum is just seeing and watching, furthermore, it is very different with the current society it has quite distance of real life in a country. Therefore, not interesting antiquated and tedious artifacts would lose people's interest elements makes it decrease for people to feel interest in the country. In other word, going museum is not the best way. Secondly, there are numerous methods to know the country. For example, in modern society, we can easily indirectly experience touch to other culture by watching television and reading books, especially in case of drama. It includes a is included with daily life of people: the way they live, the language they share, how they dress up and the home they inhabit topic rather than severe subjects in the museum. For example, I'll refer to my friend, Jason, she was very keen on USA. To find out and understand more about USA, firstly she went to the American history museum. However after visiting there she told me that there had been a lot of information made her but it had been so bored. After a few days, she started to read afiction from USA, even she watched American not only comedies but also dramas 5 times a week. She looked so happy and funny in addition become more aware of the culture and lifestyle of USA. (What does it mean? all needs to be revised) As this example shows, by doing this people might increase more understanding a certain country rather than going to the museum. | 채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 2 | 1 | 1 | 2 | Score | Limited 5-10 | - not interesting factors/ elements 는 formal essay에서는 쓰이지 않습니다. - 이유는 반드시 두 가지 이상을 적을 수 있도록 합니다. - 결론이 생략되어 있습니다.
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