▶ Your Answer :
In the reading passage, there is an ample
support for the author’s claim that genetically modified crops are beneficial.
However, the professor in the lecture gives several reasons as a rebuttal to
the author’s point.
First, the professor contends that genetically modified (full name 작성 필요) food is not an realistic solution of world hunger because real issue is about the unequal distribution
of food. To be specific, even if genetically modified crop produces more food, it does not
diminish world hunger. This casts doubt on the reading passage’s claim that genetically modified crops such as DNA modified rice can solve the problem of world hunger by
increasing crop yield.
Next, the professor insists that it would
not reduce the price of food. It costs a lot of money for companies to make new genetically modified crops, and they expect more money to be gained from the market and the purchase of these crops. So the price of seed will eventually be increased. Also, more water is needed to raise genetically modified crops. This counters the
reading passage’s claim that genetically modified crops will decrease the
prices of food by stabilizing food supplies as they are resistant to the
environmental problems, and fewer crops will be lost when people raise them.
Finally, the professor argues that genetically modified vaccines
have problems of transporting and storing difficulty. To be specific, genetically modified vaccines are used in bananas but they still spoil very quickly. It is
nothing better than the original vaccines. Also, this kind of vaccine is not
available to developing countries. This refutes the reading passage’s
suggestion that genetically modified foods can produce vaccines that are more available
than conventional vaccines, which are hard to transport. For example, genetically modified fruits
are very easy to store or ship,
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
ADDRESSING TOPIC
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ORGANIZATION
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PROGRESSION AND COHERENCE
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LANGUAGE USE
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GRAMMAR
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GOOD
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FAIR
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GOOD
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FAIR
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FAIR
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각 카테고리별 SCORE: LIMITED / FAIR / GOOD
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