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The society has become more complex
than ever, and many different resources release a lot of news every day. There
is a controversy whether a person must get information from many different news
resources. (주제 문장 copy/paste 대신 paraphrase 해 주세요) I strongly agree with the statement that a person should obtain information
from different news resources rather than relying on one type of resource. The first
reason is that people can have subjective views about issues if they get information
from only one new resource, and the second reason is because people can find balanced view by being exposed to many
different topics.
To begin
with, people can receive inaccurate information if they only get information
from one media. One news resource can lead people to have one sided view rather than having
diverse views. For instance, some new media (medium 단 media 복) are known for their conservative
views or liberal views depending on what news medias that people are watching. These
news channels show opinionated views about certain issues such as government
policies and social topics; if people are only watching these types of news
channels, people would not have a chance to hear from both sides about the
certain issues. It is a fetched assumption that one would be well-informed without
learning about many opinions from different resources. (예시로 보기에 general하므로 구체적으로 이러한 일이 있었던 상황/사례를 작성하여 detail을 보충, 주제에 대한 본인 입장을 더욱 신빙성 있게 바꾸어주세요)
Second, one
can be well-informed by broadening their perspectives. Different news resources
have various topics of the news. However, if people are only watching one news
resource, then people would be exposed to limited amount of topics. For example,
I used to watch sports channels only whenever I have a free time. After some
time, I realized that I could not follow up on the current events and trendy
news. The reason was that I did not get enough access to other news resources
that dealt with more of our current events and politics. I was more
well-informed when I started to watch other news stations besides sport
channels. (sport news만 보아서 다른 뉴스에 대해 알 수 없었다는 내용도 좋지만 1가지 주제에 대한 왜곡 보도 등 1가지 source 를 볼때와 여러 source 를 보며 견문을 넓힌 실제적인 사례/경험이 더욱 설득력 있는 주장에 도움이 되는 example이 됩니다)
Finally,
I strongly agree that people must obtain information from different news resources
to stay well-informed. The reasons are people can have objective views as well
as they can have knowledge about a wide variety of topics. + 마지막 주제에 대한 미래 등 마무리 문장 작성해주세요.
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
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FAIR
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GOOD
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FAIR
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각 카테고리별 SCORE: LIMITED / FAIR / GOOD
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- 1번과 2번 이유가 다소 겹치니 이 점 주의하시어 작성해주세요.
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