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In this set of issues, both the reading passage and the speaker discuss benefits of congestion pricing. To be specific, according to the reading, the charging system has several advantages. However, the speaker contradicts this opinion for the following reasons.
To begin with, the lecturer argues that the congestion pricing's effect would be not be positive in traffic accidents. To be specific, it is true that the charging system is able to decrease overall number of accidents. However, it also could cause more severe accidents with the reduction of vehicles in the road. In this sense, a government report showed that 30 % increase in vehicle speed made 2 times more severe accidents including serious injuries and death. 내용 더 짧게 줄여주세요. 핵심 내용만 요약해야 하므로 '이러이러해서 오히려 교통사고의 심각성이 증가한다' 라는 정도로 한 줄을 만들어주는 게 좋아요. lecture내용에서 자료로 활용한 research내용들은 '~의 연구결과를 언급하며 주장한다' 정도로만 짧게 요약하거나 아예 빼주는 게 나아요. This argument casts doubt on the reading passage's persistence that the charging system would attribute to the sharp decrease in traffic accidents.
Moreover, the speaker claims that it will be difficult for people to use public transportations when the congestion would be implemented. implimented. This is because the capacity will be exceed if more and more people use the public transport. used those. In this situation, people would feel discomfort, and it would be also difficult for them to catch buses. 이 부분도 좀 더 다듬어주시면 좋을 것 같아요. 많은 사람들이 대중교통을 이용하면 탑승해서도 불편하고 타기도 어려워져서 오히려 불편하다, 하는 식으로 겹치는 내용을 제거하고 간결하게 정리할 수 있어요. This claim refutes the reading passage's insistence that the charging system will make public transportation network more convenient.
Finally, the professor asserts that the charging system cannot have a positive impact on businesses' financial burden. The reason is that the charging system deters suburb shoppers from coming come into cities. In this regard, a report presented that retailers in a city blamed for their lagging sales. This assertion counters the reading passage's opinion that the congestion pricing would have a positive impact on businesses within a city.
In conclusion, the speaekr challenges the explanation from the reading passage on account of the reasons stated above. 요약문은 결론문단을 보통 쓰지 않으니 참고해주세요
Comment :
통합형에서는 요약문을 요구하기 때문에 분량이 너무 많은 것이 오히려 감점요인이 될 수 있어요. 꼭 필요한 핵심 내용만 남겨서 내용을 요약할 수 있도록 더 간결하게 다듬어주세요. 각 본론에서 핵심적인 detail들이 잘 반영되었는지 실제 지문과도 한 번 더 비교해주세요. 글만 놓고 봤을 때는 교통사고 심각성 / 대중교통 이용의 편의성 / 산업 발전의 세 측면에서 두 지문이 대립하는 것으로 파악되는데, 맞는지 확인해보시면 도움이 될 것 같아요. 또한 세 번째 문단의 경우는 lecture가 사용한 근거 detail이 모호하게 정리되어 있는 것 같은데, lecturer가 어떤 이유로 business관련된 주장에 반박했는지 한 번 더 체크해보시면 좋을 것 같아요. 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 3/5 A response at this level contains some important information from the lecture and conveys some relevant connection to the reading, but it is marked by one or more of the following : - Although the overall response is definitely oriented to the task, it conveys only vague, global, unclear, or somewhat imprecise connection of the points made in the lecture to points made in the reading. - The response may omit one major key point made in the lecture. - Some key points made in the lecture or the reading, or connections between the two, may be incomplete, inaccurate, or imprecise. - Errors of usage and/or grammar may be more frequent or may result in noticeably vague expressions or obscured meanings in conveying ideas and connections. |