■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Your Answer :
There is an argument
over whether or not universities should give the same amount of money to their
sports activities as to their libraries. Some people believe that universities
should pay a lot of money to their recreation centers
to encourage students to exercise. My view, however, is that universities
should more pay more attention to their
libraries. There are two reasons why, which I will explore in the following
essay.
To begin with,
universities are the place where students study. Needless to say, universities
should give a lot of money to their libraries to keep good conditions, since this is the main role of universities. (위 두 문장은 합쳐주시는 게 더 자연스러워요) There are many
things universities have to do for libraries, such as buying books which is
students require and improving computer system in their libraries. It will be
very helpful to students because most students use libraries every day for
their assignments. In my case, I am a Doctoral student so I need a lot of
references for writing a dissertation, which is a requirement for the
doctoral degree. Seoul National University, which is the a renowned university in South Korea where I am
attending now, have has a lot of books,
references, and sources in the library. This is the one of the reasons why I chose the university for my doctoral course. I
am sure that most students think universities’ libraries are the most important
factors for their work.
On top of that, the library is the place most visited by students on
campus. Compared with libraries, sports activities are not for all students.
This is because there are many students who are not interested in exercising at
all. Furthermore, there are many facilities and centers off-campus where
students can exercise. Therefore, universities should manage their libraries
the most even though universities also take charge are in charge of keeping their students’ health. To be
specific, there is a survey which is was conducted
by Survey Team A, the a reliable survey
team in the United Kingdom, and it apparently shows showed that only half of students use their universities’ sports activities whereas eighty
percent of students use their universities’ libraries. They said that most
students use off-campus exercise facilities with their family.
So for these reasons, I think that it is better for
universities to give more money to their libraries than to their sports
activities.
Writing
0-30 Score Scale |
Good (24-30) |
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26 |
Overall
Comment: |
포인트를 잘 잡으셨고 주장을 잘
펼치셨어요. 문법 오류들 때문에 감점을 드렸으니 지적사항들을 참고하세요. 저도 이렇게 주장을 펼치기 쉬운 문제가 잘 나온다, 잘 안 나온다
라고 단정 지어서 말씀 드리기가 어렵네요.. ㅠ |
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이런 식의 주장 펼치기가 명백한 조금 쉬운 주제는 잘 안 나오는 추세인가요?ㅠㅠ
늘 감사드립니다 좋은 하루 되세요!!