■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : p35 These days, with advances in technology such as the Internet and cell phones, much of our daily communication happens electronically rather than face-to-face. This is true in our personal lives as well as in business and academic settings .What is your opinion of these changes in how we communicate? Are the effects positive, negative, or both? Provide specific reasons and details to support your answer. |
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▶ Your Answer :
With the advent of modern technologies, our societies have been changed by far faster than expected. Some people might say that advanced technologies can make people to deteriorate their relationship among friends, relatives and others. However, in my opinion, I firmly believe that the development of technologies have a myriad of affirmative effects, which can help people keep in touch with others and enhance efficiency related with work process for the following two subsequent reasons. To begin with, telecommunication techniques are good at contacting others conveniently. To be specific, people can connect with others using various methods such as cell phones, email and other electronic devices. To put it another way, the technology leads to communication with people conveniently and faster than in the past. Therefore, people deliver their news and events by using the improved technologies anytime and anywhere without any hindrances. For example, I could not visit my parents' house everyday due to a long distance, because it takes more than two hours by car. However, I could keep in touch with my parents everyday by using videotelephony regardless of the place I am. From the usage of the new function, it is clearly seen that the new technology has a positive influence on our lives.
On top of that, another beneficial factor of the technology is to save time and money. To explain, by making use of state-of-the-art technologies, cost-effective aspects can be improved significantly. For example, in the past, many universities required all applicants to submit their applications by mail in order to confirm the original papers. However, with the advancement of technology related to checking the truth of applications, most universities accept applications online. In doing that, students can reduce the period of the submission and save money by using Internet submission process.
To sum up, taking the benefits of the technology into consideration, it has many advantages. Especially, new devices promote to contact others easily anywhere. In this regard, I strongly believe that the merits of the technology far outweigh its counterpart.
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