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Some people might think that the young at present are more independent from their parent compared the past. However, in my opinion, young people nowadays still rely on their parents them even much more than the past for the following two reasons.
To begin with, more and more younger generations cannot be separated from their parents. There are several reasons. One is global financial crisis. The downfall of the economy economics in many countries caused the young’s reliance on their parents' financial support. home and allowance. In addition, the other reason is probably that parents nowadays tend to do everything for their children. from when they were child. This generation is called the dependent generation. In this sense, the concept of kangaroo tribe was emerged. This concept indicates that people who depend on their parents either financially or emotionally or both, even after becoming an adult. This phenomenon is very common prevails in many countries. For example, according to an article published in Sweden, the number of young adults who still live with their parents kangaroo tribe among the young in the country has been increasing since the economic crisis in 2008. is increasing consistently after the global financial crisis in 2008. So 25 percentage of this young generation in Sweden are relying on their parents greatly. The article stressed that this trend is in sharp contrast to the past when children left home when they became adults. notably contrasts to the past when the most young were separated from their parents after becoming an adult.
On top of that, for all people, being independent from parents might be actually impossible. This is because some problems in life cannot be easily solved. do not change despite of the flow of time. Human relationships can be such an example. Although many aspects of life are replaced by machines, It is necessary for human beings to build human networks and to maintain them. it. Moreover, since problems related to relationships are with it is always difficult, and the most effective solution is myriad of experience, so young people need the assistance of their parents who are experienced in life.have a wide range of experience. I know this from my experience. For example, When I was 23 years old, my old friend misunderstood me. had misconception about me that I stabbed her’s back. It was not true, but I did not know how solve the situation because I was so embarrassed. So, I asked my mother for help, and she told me that I had to contact for her and explained the situation. truth. I did what she said, and as a result, my friend felt sorry about the misjudgement. misunderstand of me. Finally, we were able to reconcile. recovered close relationship.
In conclusion, young people these days are dependent on their parents more than previous generations. This is because people cannot afford to live on their own due to the global economic crisis, and also because it it more beneficial to live with their parents. In this regard, I firmly believe that the young today are still relying on their parents.
realistic conditions such as high price or global financial crisis make young people’s independence from their parent more difficult, and parent’s diverse experience and wisdom are still helpful for the young. In this regard, I firmly believe that the young today are still relying on their parent.
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