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Some people think that most children' future should not be determined made by their parents decision because each young people have different inclination. However, in my opinion, I do not agree with the idea for the following two reasons that I am going to elaborate. It This is because that parents not only have more useful knowledge but also know their better thier children better than themselves.
To begin with, the old people have parents can make a better decision for their children with a broader knowledge and wider experience through their whole life, which are key factors of success. It is because that they are able to know how to live the world and which occupation to choose they select for better future of children. Let me take my personal example. When I was about to decide on my major which I majored in the university, I selected public administration made a decision adminstration instead of business administraton that as recommended by my father recommened. My father He thought that government officials are one of the best jobs for me due to stable salary and authorityof making policies for our nation. In the end, I ended up being Following his advice, I became a civil servant supporting small medium business and start up company, I am and feel very proud of my current job.
On top of that, the common parents know better about their children's child what they have inclination and what they have strength or weakness. Many young man and woman are inclined to follow the preference of peer group or recent trends of a society. According to the survey conducted by Education Ministry of Korea, 87 percent of young participants in middle school answered that they were affected by peers and trends when they would decide to future jobs. However, this study also showed that most of them thought that the jobs that their parent recommend are better for them than those that they want to. (Not matched with above sentence) I believe I have accurately demonstrated my point of view on this matter with two concrete reasons and evidence stated above. I firmly think that most kids have to listen to opinion of parents about future career.
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