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Undoubtedly, technology has been developed and given a big impact on people. Some people think that technology dose does not have any advantages for people to make them smarter. However, I do not agree with the opinion above. This is because technology has enables people to get more information and helps people study more effectively. First of all, technology helps people gain a lot of information. Development of technology allows people to do various research and experiments. Therefore, people can keep discovering new information through these studies. I have an example of my uncle. When my uncle was a young child, he sometimes shared his snack with his dog. One day, after eating chocolate that my uncle gave, his dog became sick and eventually, he died. My uncle said that he did not know the reason why his dog died. However, after a few years, scientists found out that one of the components of chocolate was fatal to a dog and my uncle could know that he should not give chocolate to a dog. Second, people can study more effectively with the help of the Internet. Thanks to the Internet which is a typical example of technological development, people can access to visual resources such as an image and video regarding their study, and it helps people understand contents easily. When I studied physicsal in a middle school, there were some difficult principles for me to understand but I did not have any reference resources except my textbook. Thus, I could not get a good grade on the test.(교과서밖에 참고할 것이 없어서 시험을 못봤다는거죠?) However, later, my friend introduced me a website that had multiple visual resources which I could use to understand important principles. It made me study the physical helped me to study Physics effectively and I could get a higher grade on the next test. To sum up, I believe that technology makes people smarter than before. This is because technology can have help people get new information by allowing them to do research and the Internet helps people study more effectively with visual resources.
[Score] 26-27 [Feedback] - 전반적으로 잘 쓰여진 글입니다. 문장의 흐름도 자연스럽고, 큰 문법적 오류도 없었으며, 쉬운 예시들을 통해 주장을 잘 뒷받침해 준 것 같아요. - 두번째 문단의 physical은 physics(물리)의 오타인가요? 확인해주세요~ |