The reading passage claims that prohibition the plastic bag in local stores for environment is unnecessary. However, the speaker contradicts the reading with opposing views.
To begin with, while the reading passage argues that if the plastic bag is banned in local store, people would use the paper bag instead, the speaker actually points out that it would not really happen, because it has many shortcomings. So, not the paper bag but cloth bag will replace the plastic bag, as it was popular with consumer in UK. 비닐백을 종이백이 대체하지 않고 천가방이 대체할 것이라는 반박은 lecture가 비닐백 금지 입장에서 나온 주장이라고 보기에는 조금 어색해요. 각 지문의 주요 주장이 '비닐봉지 금지가 필요하다/아니다'로 대립되는 게 아니라 lecture가 천가방을 옹호하는 입장을 main idea로 하고 있는 것은 아닌지 확인해보시면 좋을 것 같아요.
On top of that, the speaker casts doubt on the reading that plastic bag is also recyclable as other recyclable materials. Her argument continues that it is not true that plastic bag can easily be recycled. She also asserts that many recycle companies are unwilling to accept plastic, because it is often stuck in recycle machine. Accordingly, even if people want to recycle, they can’t.
Furthermore, the speaker refutes the reading which maintains that it will be ineffective if plastic bag is only forbidden at the local store, because people anyways will bring plastic bags from other towns anyway. She states her refutation that once people get used to the cloth bags, they will always take them anywhere because cloth bags are it is easy to carry, and use their cloth bags wherever they go for shopping, even to other towns.
Comment :
서론에서는 비닐봉지 사용 금지가 불필요하다/아니다 정도로만 main topic이 소개되어 있는데, 각 본론에서는 lecture가 단순히 비닐봉지 사용 금지가 필요하다는 정도의 설명이 아니라 천가방 사용 장려에 대한 내용까지 설명하고 있는 걸 생각하면 main topic을 더 정확히 정리할 필요가 있어 보입니다. reading의 주장에 lecturer가 '어떤 근거로' 반박하는지가 좀 더 명확히 드러나면 좋을 것 같습니다. 두 지문의 대립구조를 잘 드러내는 데 초점을 두고 다듬어주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 3.5/5
A response at this level contains some important information from the lecture and conveys some relevant connection to the reading, but it is marked by one or more of the following :
- Although the overall response is definitely oriented to the task, it conveys only vague, global, unclear, or somewhat imprecise connection of the points made in the lecture to points made in the reading.
- The response may omit one major key point made in the lecture.
- Some key points made in the lecture or the reading, or connections between the two, may be incomplete, inaccurate, or imprecise.
- Errors of usage and/or grammar may be more frequent or may result in noticeably vague expressions or obscured meanings in conveying ideas and connections.