▶ Your Answer :
The reading and the lecture both talk about
wave-energy referring also referred as
wave farms. The reading states this alternative energy will be more and more
prevalent in the future, because it contributes to several benefits. However
the lecturer says that the statement mentioned in the reading are not
limited incorrect. In fact, he argues that there are several negative effects of
this energy.
Firstly, the reading contends that this
(무엇을 가르키는 거죠?) is because wave farms are
dependent generators of power. Although the lecturer admits that they make use
of waves that are persistent and expectable, she states that the advantageous
opinion in the reading is faulty. He says that the technique of this energy is harsh to
the marine ecosystem. In other words it leads to
the destruction destroy of the function
of the marine system.
Secondly, in the reading, the author
contends that to speak its (무엇을 나타내는거죠)
facilities, the wave-energy has been confirmed to be environmentally friendly.
However the speaker totally disagrees with this claim. As the speaker’s speech He
states that there is a fact that is easy
to dismiss. To be specific, he argues that the
substance is harmful to the ocean. However this chemical substance is used
in many devices such as the cell-phone (이 문장을 왜 넣으신거죠?). Ironically, because this elements
contains toxic, it result in the weakening of the marine ecosystem marine
weaken.
Thirdly, the reading goes on to say that
this energy does not have any negative influence on the natural beauty of the
surrounding environment. In contrast, the lecturer totally contradicts this
statement, arguing that because of the wave-energy floating visual
elements with vessels over the ocean can be seen. Even it is painted bright
color, we can present this beautiful landscape to many tourists. (20분) (뜻 파악이 어렵습니다)
Writing
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Comment: |
전체적으로 문법 오류가 너무
많습니다. 위 지적사항들을 참고하세요. 두 입장의 비교도 제대로 되지 않았습니다. 문법 오류 때문에 파악하기 어려운 문장도 많았고요. 소의
일치 오류가 많으시고, 흐름에 맞지 않는 문장들도 있어서 감점을 드렸습니다.
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