▶ Your Answer : Without
doubt, lots of advanced technologies have improved the quality of people’s
lives and there are countless things possible nowadays that people in the past
couldn’t even imagine. Some people think life is easier and more comfortable
than it was when our grandparents were children, while others do not. If I had
to choose one, I would say that life is getting more complicated and difficult
than it was in the past. There are some reasons and examples as follows.
First,
many people don’t have work and nor life balance because of the Internet and new
technologies. Since smart phones are commonly used in the society, people have
lost their private time and freedom. As people are contactable anywhere and
at anytime, more people work on weekends and get disturbed by others when they
need to spend time with their family families. From my own experience, last year when I
went on a Taiwan trip with my close friend for a week, she kept receiving calls
from her boss and colleagues. In As a result, she had to find a computer and do some
work and couldn’t fully enjoy the trip.
Moreover,
nowadays society is getting more competitive and its entry bar is much higher
than before. Many countries in the world have been staggering in their bad
economies and the job markets are have not been very positive. In this situation, people
tend started to work harder and students try tried to prove themselves’ their ability abilities by learning
new skills or going to graduate schools to get a job. According to the survey’s
result of Seoul National University, the top school of South Korea, the study has
shown that 30 percent of their university graduate students continued to go to
graduate schools directly and this trend increases increased every year.
To
sum up, it is not true that life is easier today and more comfortable than it
was when our grandparents are children. This is because the advent of the Internet and
technologies made people work harder and have less private time and the job
market is getting more competitive.
Score: 28-29
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