▶ Your Answer : The lecturer asserts that positively looking wave farms positive is just an illusion. This counters the reading passage's claim that wave farms are is good and they are about to increasingly common in a prolonged time.
Firstly, the lecturer says that the wave farm is not reliable to generate power. To be specific, the wave farm has technical problem which can make made a disruption. Especially, iIts new technology has a problem in of breaking down. Moreover, convertors in the wave facilities tend to fluctuate. This casts doubt on the reading passage's claim that wave farm is believable generators of power which is going to replace fossil fuel energy.
Also, the lecturer insists that calling wave farm friendly environment-friendly energy is easy to dismiss. For example, the convertors actually have damages on the environments and emit chemical substances organic which would be very toxic iIf It have they leaked in ocean. This contradicts the reading passage's claim that wave farm turns out to be environmentally good.
Finally, the lecturer argues that the wave farm affects beauty of landscape negatively. For instance, the color of the convertors in the ocean is too so bright that iIt is visible to shipping vessels. This refutes the reading passage's claim that wave farm does not have harmful impact on its scenery.
Comment : wave farm을 긍정적으로 보는 reading과 이에 반박하는 lecture의 입장이 일관되게 잘 서술된 점이 좋았어요. 다만 lecturer가 어떤 근거로 reading의 주장에 반박하는지가 불분명한 문단들은 보완이 필요하겠습니다. 내용 분량을 더 늘리는 것이 아니라, 분량은 꼭 필요한 부분들만 더 추가하고 단어표현이 애매하게 된 부분들을 정확하게 키워드로 드러낼 수 있도록 다듬어주시는 게 좋아요. 어색한 표현과 대소문자오류, 문법오류도 꼼꼼하게 검토해주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 3/5 A response at this level contains some important information from the lecture and conveys some relevant connection to the reading, but it is marked by one or more of the following : - Although the overall response is definitely oriented to the task, it conveys only vague, global, unclear, or somewhat imprecise connection of the points made in the lecture to points made in the reading. - The response may omit one major key point made in the lecture. - Some key points made in the lecture or the reading, or connections between the two, may be incomplete, inaccurate, or imprecise. - Errors of usage and/or grammar may be more frequent or may result in noticeably vague expressions or obscured meanings in conveying ideas and connections. |