ㄷ■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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Both the writer and the speaker are talking about the extinction of Stellar's Sea Cow. On the one hand, the text says said that it disappeared because of three reasons; overhunting by a lot of native Siberian people, severe competition for food supply and hunting by European fur traders. However oOn the other hand, the professors refutes it with the statement argues that these theories are unreasonable for several reasons. with following reasons.
First of all, the author states that tremendous hunting by many native Siberian people made this species extinct. extincted. In contrast, the lecturer contradicts this statement because the Stellar's Sea Cow was too huge to hunt a lot, especially its size is 9 meters and weighs more than 10 tons.
Secondly, according to the text, one of the main reasons why the species disappeared is overwhelmed competition for getting their foods. To On the contrary, the professors rebuts this idea with the reason that humans did not hunt the otters that much and there were a lot of predators of sea urchins excluding them. 밑줄 친 내용이 reading의 주장과 맥락상 맞지 않는 것 같아요. reading의 주장은 sea cow들끼리 경쟁해서 개체수가 줄고 멸종에 이르렀다는 내용인데, 갑자기 otter나 sea urchins가 나오는 것은 어색하게 느껴질 수 있어요. '그들의 먹이가 되는' otter와 sea urchin의 수와 관련된 설명이라면 '그들의 먹이가 되는' 것들이라는 설명이 함께 요약되어야 맥락이 자연스러워질 수 있겠습니다. 지문 내용을 한번 더 확인해주세요.
Last but not least, the writer argues that because of the European fur traders' hunting, the Stellar's Sea Cow was has been extinct. extincted. However, the speaker says it is not reliable because they came to the islands long after it has disappeared. What I mean is that Nnone of them existed exists at the time they arrived at the islands so it does not make any sense.
Comment :
reading과 lecture가 주장하는 내용들을 대부분 잘 정리해주신 것 같아요. lecture의 반박 근거를 제시할 때 자연스러운 맥락을 드러낼 수 있도록 연결고리를 잘 만들어주시면 좋을 것 같아요. 실제 지문과 비교하면서 꼭 필요한데 빠진 detail이나 잘못 정리된 내용은 없는지 한번 더 확인해주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 3.5/5
A response at this level contains some important information from the lecture and conveys some relevant connection to the reading, but it is marked by one or more of the following :
- Although the overall response is definitely oriented to the task, it conveys only vague, global, unclear, or somewhat imprecise connection of the points made in the lecture to points made in the reading.
- The response may omit one major key point made in the lecture.
- Some key points made in the lecture or the reading, or connections between the two, may be incomplete, inaccurate, or imprecise.
- Errors of usage and/or grammar may be more frequent or may result in noticeably vague expressions or obscured meanings in conveying ideas and connections.