Although there is no complete consensus that has been
reached on this topic, yet I would like to take a stance and make my
disagreement with the given thesis that the best way to relax and reduce stress
is by spending some time alone. In order to substantiate my central focal
points, I will provide specific reasons and explore the given topic in great
detail in this essay.
To
begin with, I firmly believe that the best way to relax and reduce stress is
spending time with friends. Opponents of my perspective claim that the best way
of reducing stress is being alone and relax in a quiet atmosphere. Proponents
of this view propose several points as the
rationales for their argument and their argument might have some validity. But
after closer look, there exists an abundance of examples that calling into
question what they claim. Among such examples, my personal experience can
elucidate their incorrect viewpoint. When I often meet my friends when I
was am stressed out. When we meet, my
friends and I usually talk and listen to each other’s hardships which make
us to be stressful stress us. As far as I am concerned, I think it is really good for each other
to talk about hardships and help out how each
other out on how to relieve each other. Moreover, even if
we don’t really talk about that, it was also helpful for me to reduce stress
and relax that by hanging out and having
some time with them. This validates my earlier contention that being with
friends is the best way to relax and reduce stress. (문단의 첫 파트는 장황하고 화려하게 템플릿을 이용해서 잘 시작했지만, 예시가 너무 약합니다. 템플릿을 벗어나자마자 문법 오류가 많습니다.)
The
account of mine that I illustrated above is not the only evidence to support my
view. A recent survey conducted by one of the leading educational consulting
firms in Korea endorsed my opinion when the survey respondents were asked
whether they sided with the argument that there are more possibilities to
get depressed (이게 주제가 아니지 않나요?) when people are stressed out. A leading educational
expert claimed that the worst situation when
people are stressed out is being alone. This is because, it is much easier to
stay in a depression rather than giving themselves time to relax, and therefore getting out of the depression. They would
just think negatively about the circumstances that they are getting through. As
a result, they would be more stressed out and would not be able to help
themselves to relax. (예시가 설득력이 부족합니다.)
In
conclusion, in spite of the fact that there may be opinions that being alone
help to relax and reduce stress, However, taking into account of all the
factors that I described above, we may reach to the conclusion that the best
way to relax and reduce stress is spending time with friends, and not being
alone.