▶ Your Answer :
I agree because first, we get easily
distracted when in a group second, individual studying allows us to go at our
own pace.
First,
we get distracted more easily in a group. Privacy increases focus, even if we
may feel like we get more done in a group. On our own, we are always aware when
we get off topic or when our mind drifts. As a member of a group, we sometimes
feel as though we are working, when we are really off topic. After all, who
among us has not hasn’t
watched a group conversation slowly evolve away from the intended topic? By
the time we realize that we are not working, we have wasted more time. Plus, we
did not didn’t shut
down our brains, so we do not don’t get the benefits of a break like when we are distracted
alone.
Second, individual studying allows us
to go at our own pace, thereby ensuring that our brains are fully engaged. Some
people in groups tend to sit back and let others do the work, while they try to
follow along at a pace that is either too fast for them to keep up or so slow
that they lose interest. In groups, we instinctively mimic others’
opinions and tend towards group opinions. At the same time, we lose track of
our own questions and difficulties. We succumb to peer pressure, because we do
not want to draw attention to our divergence from the group, losing important
opportunities for learning as we study.
So I agree with the
statement that says "It is better to study alone than in a group."
Because first, we get easily distracted when in a group,
and second, individual studying allows us to go at our own pace.
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