■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : It is always better to save money you earn rather than spend it right away. |
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▶ Your Answer : I disagree with the statement 'It is always better to save money you earn rather than spend it right away.'. I think while sometimes saving money can be the right disision (철자오류 -> decision), other times it could not be the solution. It is true that if you save money sometimes, you can spend your savings on much more important issues such as buying a house, or for your future universaty (철자오류 -> university) admission money ect and so on. This could be much more important then (철자 오류 -> than) spending the money about on the things it that seem important right now.
However, I disagree with the statement because of the word 'always'. It isnt 'always' better to save money.
First, If you save your money every time you earn, then when are you going to spend it? And how are you going to know when to spend it? Being careful is good, but you couldnt can't decide when to spend the money if you only continue to save money over and over again. You need to have a specific standard when or when not to spend your money. To have such standards, you have to spend money (목적어 필수) to know when is the right time to spend. Thus, its it is not wise to always save money when you have a chance. Second, just delaying the time to spending spend your money might not always be the right thing to do. Sure, if your impulse to spend money right now is a very trival (철자 오류 -> trivial) thing such as buying a bag you want or buying a hat you want just because you 'want' it is unwise, but if you really need a bag becasue (철자 오류 -> because) the bag you have is torn, or if you need a house renting bill right now becasue (철자오류) you dont (철자오류 -> don't OR do not) have any money, then in these moments, you need to spend the money right now. And if those moments are in the present, then it could be a smart thing to spend your money right away rather then (철자오류 -> than) saving them. You cant (철자오류 -> can't OR cannot) delay your spending just because you think you will have greater needs later. 'Spending your money now' can sometimes be more wise wiser then just postponing later.
To summerize, 'always' saving money might not 'always' be the right thing to do. You have to decide weather (철자오류 -> whether) it is the right time to spend money (목적어 필수) or not.
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