▶ Your Answer :
I agree that teachers are required to motivate
students to learn and also, think that it is beneficial to motivate students
for education. The following reasons and examples will support my opinion.
Firstly, teachers’
behaviors have lots of influence on students in school. It depends on how well
teachers behave for students. In my experience, I used to teach young students
in a private school. I realized that teachers’
behavior is very important to students because students tend to reflect through
teachers’ behaviors. When they didn’t focus on their study, I was always
motivating and attracting them to pay attention to their study. As a result,
they started to change their behaviors. They fixed their behaviors as well as
improved their grades. For this reason, it is
necessary to motivate students to learn.
Secondly, I think
there are is a good relationship between
teachers and students. Also, I’m sure that teachers could be their parents
while students are in school. Therefore, it occurs emotional ties rise between them. A video that I saw from YouTube shows that many students are losing emotional
communication with their parents and teachers. It results in misunderstandings between students and adults and it leads them to feel lonely and frustrated. That’s why
teachers should help them with motivating and talk a lot in school.
In conclusion, I recommend that teachers should
motivate them to learn for education because teachers’ behaviors have influence
on students and there will be a good
relationship between them. For these reasons, it is very important to motivate
students to learn.
Writing
0-30 Score Scale |
Fair (17-23) |
Score |
23 |
Overall
Comment: |
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