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Undoubtedly, a friend plays a significant role in people’s daily lives in many of the places where they work or play. Some people think that playing with friends who are similar to them is more beneficial for them, while others do not believe in that way. Both sides may have their own reasons to support their views. If I were asked to choose one, I would say that having friends who are different from them is the best way to increase their happiness. There are several reasons as follows. To begin with, when people have friends who are different from them, it can contribute to an increase in their overall happiness. It gives them a chance to experience something different from what they would do in their usual routine. Such a new experience tends to prevent them from feeling bored in life. For example, when my sister was in high school, she often felt depressed thinking that her life became an exhausting routine. To survive in a competitive world, she spent whole day studying all academic subjects hoping that she could outdo others. Fortunately, she was able to deal with such pressure and stress in a safe way by spending some time with friends from different countries. She started to learn about other cultures and their languages. By doing this, she was able to let off some steam and broadened her perspectives. If she had only stuck to her own kind, she would not have been able to escape her boring life. All things considered, I strongly believe that the advantage (Only one body paragraph was suggested) of playing with friends who are different from them far outweigh the disadvantages. All in all, the importance of new experience obtained through spending with friends who are different from them cannot be overestimated in the pursuit of happiness in life.
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
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ORGANIZATION
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PROGRESSION AND COHERENCE
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LANGUAGE USE
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GRAMMAR
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FAIR
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FAIR
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FAIR
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GOOD
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각 카테고리별 SCORE: LIMITED / FAIR / GOOD
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