▶ Your Answer :
There
might be some people who believe that eating out in restaurants or food stands
is better than eating homemade foods. However, I personally disagree with the
idea above for subsequent reasons. First of all, homemade food is fresh. Second, it is much cheaper than eating out in restaurants
or food stands.
First of all, homemade
food is fresher than restaurants' food. When
people make homemade food, people usually buy fresh vegetable, meat and fruit. It is because people really care about their health. Let me bring up my personal
story as an example. When I was young, my family generally made dinner at home. (made home-made food for
dinner.) My parents think that restaurants or food stands do not use fresh
ingredients. (instead of using fresh materials.) That is why I am healthy now. If
my family had not eaten homemade food, I might have not been healthy now.
Second, it is much cheaper than eating out in restaurants or food
stands. Restaurants and food stands try to make money by selling their food so their
meals are more expensive than homemade food. In contrast, when we cook at home, we do not care about making money. According to a recent survey
done by an institute of healthy food, (무슨 기관인지 모르겠네요.) 90 percent of the respondents said that eating
at home is much cheaper than eating out in restaurants or food stands.
This is because they usually make food at home to
save money. They also know that eating
out is expensive because of tips, the price of
meals and so on. This clearly shows that eating homemade food is better than
eating out in restaurants or food stands.
In conclusion, homemade
food is fresh and it is much cheaper than eating out in restaurants or food
stands. For these two reasons, I personally believe that eating homemade food
is better than eating out in restaurants or food stands.
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