▶ Your Answer : People's imagination definitely changed the world much into a splendid place to live. With this understanding, I believe that people enjoy happier and more satisfied lives compared to the past. This is because technological developments has provided convenience to people, and people can enjoy more and creative entertainment contents.
Firstly, developments of technologies in a variety of realms has lead people to enjoy a better quality of life. Before developments of technologies, people had hard time keeping in touch with families and peers. People had to patiently walk or ride a horse to get to their desired destinations. Also, people had to visit shops to buy items. If they could not find items they wanted, they had to seek those things in other stores. However, developments of technologies freed people from such discomfort. The promotion of a mobile phone allows people to stay in touch with their families members and friends at any time no matter the location. Developments of automobile transportations enable people to reach destinations faster at cheaper cost. Especially, the advancement of the internet has changed how people set out their businesses by running online stores, making a brick and mortar store no more relevant. People now only have to make several clicks to purchase items. Such developments has increased the life satisfaction rendering the world a happier place to live.
Secondly, people can enjoy more creative entertainment contents. Interestingly, a renowned social scientist recently published an article in 'The Korean Herald' claiming that people the increase of entertainment contents has lead people to enjoy a better quality of life. According to the article, the number of show programs broadcasted in the TV increased by 62 percent and more than 2000 games were promoted during last 7 years. Not only the number of contents increased but also people put a lot of effort to make contents unique with their creativity to meet people's demand. For example, a game programmer recently promoted a game called 'The green world'. The game is about surviving in a deserted island through constructing buildings and making devices from trees. More than 4 million copies were sold in a week. Buyers of the game added that the game helped people to seek diversions which they could not encounter in ordinary games and other entertainments' contents. Consequently, such tendency in the developments of entertainments contents helps people to enjoy happier lives.
To sum up, people are more joyful life in these days compared to the past for the following reasons; developments of technologies has provided convenience to people, and entertainment contents are gradually increasing and becoming more creative. Consequently, the importance of my view cannot be underestimated due to the reason I have mentioned above.
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