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The reading passage contends that the ashen light of Venus can be fully explained by three theories. On the other hand, the lecturer brings up several points that contradict this argument. First, the lecturer argues that the ashen light could not resulted from a chemical process in Venus’s atmosphere. This is because, normally, the light produced when the recombination of carbon dioxide takes place is too so faint so that researchers should use extreme powerful telescope to observe it. However, the ashen light could be observed by simple telescope. 이 부분 내용 가능하다면 표현을 좀 더 간단하게 줄여도 될 것 같아요. This casts doubt on the reading passage’s argument that the light is attributed to a chemical recombination. Second, according to the lecturer, it is unlikely that the glow results from sunlight reflected off clouds. If the light is reflected sunlight, the ashen light would be observed not rarely but much more often. This refutes the reading passage’s assertion that the sunlight reflected by the clouds of Venus cause the ashen light.
The final points made by the lecturer is that it is untrue that aurorae result resulted in the glow. This is supported by the fact that Venus does not have a magnetic field which is necessary to make aurorae. Aurorae is the phenomenon that occurs is occurred when plasma particles collide with atoms in the magnetic field. Aurorae는 Aurora의 복수표현입니다. 문단 전체에서 쓸 표현을 둘 중 하나로 정해서 수일치해주세요. Therefore, aurorae cannot occur be occurred in Venus. This counters the reading passage’s claim that the aurorae bring about the ashen light of Venus.
Comment : 두 지문의 대립포인트가 잘 드러나게 정리해주셨어요. 필요 이상으로 표현이 길어지는 부분들이 생기지 않게 유의하면서 요약해주세요. 시제일치나 수일치에서 오류가 좀 있으니 이 부분 신경써서 검토해주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 4.5/5 A response at this level is generally good in selecting the important information from the lecture and in coherently and accurately presenting this information in relation to the relevant information in the reading, but it may have minor omission, inaccuracy, vagueness, or imprecision of some content from the lecture or in connection to points made in the reading. A response is also scored at this level if it has more frequent or noticeable minor language errors, as long as such usage and grammatical structures do not result in anything more than an occasional lapse of clarity or in the connection of ideas.
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