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Some people might think that government should invest in improving public transportation. however, I disagree with that prior opinion about improving public transportation. My opinion is that government should invest in developing medial technologies. people these days going go through a lot of ailment that generated in the globalized world and they worried about their families are attacked by ailment. so I personally believe that government have to invent in developing medical technologies. there are two reasons that supporting my opinion. first, developing medial technologies would able to improve life quality of people who suffering by illness. second, it also one of the far better way to increase their revenue from exporting their developing medial technologies. To begin with, if a state (What does it indicate?) invest in increase medial technologies to deal with sicked people, it would be able to help them and their families who suffering by their ailment. moreover developing medial technologies can improve people who look forward to become healthier than before. A varieties of medial technologies can cure fix a serious disease even a can fix cancer. for example my mother’s friend got a disease which is breast cancer and her family experienced a life of nadir term. (What's that meaning?) but the doctor said there is new technology could help to treat disease she got. and then they decided that cure the diseases which she got and she was quickly recovering from can treated breast cancer that many person around her thought that it won’t be cured it. they living jovial life then now. Second, developing medial technologies can lead to prosperity of countries that invent in developing medial technologies. first of all treatment is the most efficient and valuable technology that many countries need. if they do develop the technology about to rescue people them whom suffering from by diseases, many countries will contact to import or buy their technology that they make for person who adverse sickness. 1 week ago, for instance, I could read an article about trade and I realized that especially Korea is regarded as lead total trading amount of medical technology as a medically advanced country. In conclusion, I agree with the statement that government should invest money in developing medial technologies. This is because, it can help them and their families who suffering by their ailments, and it also can lead to prosperity of countries that invent in developing medial technologies. so as is korea's usual practice, if korea keep going to developing medial technologies, it will be a far better ways to the nations prosperity. so, government should invest in developing medial technologies.
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