▶ Your Answer :
Recently living roof is becoming a trend across
the world. The author is saying that living roof is one of the revolutionary
idea, but the lecturer disagrees with the author’s statement for several
reasons.
Firstly, the reading says living roof is
helpful in creating spaces that can be used as a park, but the lecturer disagrees
with the following and says living roof cannot can’t be a solution. The reason is
because its accessibility is so low that people cannot easily approach compared
to parks.
Secondly, the reading states that living
roof has a good view, so it will enhance and motivate the city, but the
lecturer denies with the reason. The lecturer speaks about his experience on
the living roof and when he got get there the view was surrounded with buildings so
it was not what he expected to see in the living roof that he imagined.
Lastly,
the script points that living roof is efficient in cost saving because it helps
to save energy used in building, for example like air conditioner because
living roof helps maintain the temperature., Hhowever, the lecturer argues that
it will cost more than expected. If a building tries to install the living roof,
it costs two billion dollar plus other additional fees such as soil, plant,
water and etc. Therefore, it will ascend just energy saving?
Good (24–26)
축약형 지양해주세요. can't-->cannot 문맥에 맞는 동사 시제로 써주세요.
마지막 본문에서 첫문장 너무 깁니다. 쪼개주세요. 같은 문장에서, for example 로 문장 여러개 이을 수 없습니다. however도 마찬가지 입니다. 문장; for example, /however, 로 써주세요.
마지막 문장 이해가 어렵습니다.
전체적으로 내용 정리는 괜찮으나, 문장력과 문법 연습이 필요합니다. 수고하셨습니다~
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