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Student’s intellectual, social and personal development is highly influenced by practical experiences. With this understanding, I believe that students should be required a variety of courses outside the student’s field of study by the university. This is because various fieldsof studies enable students to broaden their educational perspectives and enjoy a better quality of life in terms of job opportunities. Firstly, taking a variety of courses outside the student’s field of study makes students to broaden educational perspectives. Understanding the educational effects of the students and the potential role of field trip offered by the university is necessary to substantiate this view. (Not adequate) To be specific, taking the courses on the outside the student’s field of study means opportunities to learn new ideas, because what is commonly accepted as the concept on the textbooks may lack of case in real society. In these situation, students can learn more detail such as watching work process and taking experiments about technical devices. (By doing what?) Being able to shift educational places helps students to understanding deeply and improve their interesting about concept of the lectures. In this regard, I argue that taking a variety of courses outside the student’s field of study allow students to broaden educational perspectives. Secondly, taking a variety of courses outside the student’s field of study makesstudents to enjoy a better quality of life in terms of working environment. Interestingly, a renowned social scientist in South Korea published an article in “The Korean Herald” last Tuesday which claims that taking field trip offered by the university enables students to strengthen competitiveness in society. The article argues that the 84 percent of 200 Korean leading recruiters prefer students who had taken a lot of field trip. The recruiters show a such tendency because they tend to be more practical and efficient. In the long run, the practical mindset and the effective ability of processing the works enhance work performances, which results from that they have well-balanced working knowledge based on practical experience which taken various field trip during their university years. Ultimately these ability helps job promotion and enjoy a better quality of life in terms of working environment. I thought of this report because the results of the survey resonated with my thoughts. To sum up, I believe that it is important for university to require students to take a variety of courses outside the student’s field of study for the following reasons: broadening educational perspectives and enjoying a better quality of life in terms of working environment. Consequently, the importance of my view cannot be underestimated for the reasons I have mentioned above. | 채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 3 | 2 | 2 | 1 | Score | Limited 10-13 | - 대부분의 내용이 간결하지 않고 정확하지 않습니다. - outside 때문에 field trip으로 착각하신 것 같아요. 자신의 major field 가 아니라 전공을 벗어난 다른 분야의 공부를 하는 것이 좋은 것인지를 묻는 내용이었습니다. - Off topic입니다.
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