▶ Your Answer :Although there is no complete consensus that has been reached on the topic. I strongly believe that it is better to live alone not with roommate. This is because when you live alone, you will going to learn basic behaving that is needed in daily life and if you live with roommate there is no personal time.
To begin with, living alone teaches you how to do basic house chores behaviors. If you live alone, Iit increase your ability to do basic things because you should know how to do basic tasks such as cooking,^cleaning or doing dishes which is helpful in your life. For example, when iI was a freshman in freshmen on college, I used a single dormitory room dormitory which is single room. I had to more care about doing laundry and cleaning the room tha-t I i did not care before when I i lived with my family. I still care a lot about sanitation because of this habit.
On top of that, we need personal time. Although it can be pleasing and vigorous to live with roommates, but sometimes, it is so noisy that leads to stress. Thus, we need time to think or meditate alone. For instance, most of my friends prefer to live alone than with roommates. They all have common complaints that it is too noisy and dirty to live with roommate. Moreover, in order to do tasks which need to concentrate such as studying, they have to ask to be excused. However, they can not hope roommates understanding everyday. Hence, my friends tell me that they want to live alone. Thus, they can to do personal behavior.
To sum up, living alone helps people to do personal behavior and they can learn basic house chores behaviors that is necessary on your mundane life. In this regard, I think that living alone is better than living with roommates.
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첫번째 본문 -basic behavior은 기본 행동으로, 본인이 말하고자 하는 바와 다른 의미입니다. 집안일이나 혼자 사는 법, 등등으로 다르게 표현해주세요. -대소문자 오류 -띄어쓰기 오류 -내가 freshman 때 이므로, 단수 표현해주세요. (1명) -표현면에서, 짧은 표현인데 which 절로 넣어주면 불필요하게 복잡해집니다. a single dormitory room으로 하시는게 깔끔합니다. -~했어야했다의 의미를 강조해주세요. I had to -대소문자 오류 -마지막 문장은 내용상 불필요합니다.
두번째 본문 -vigor 명사/ vigorous 형용사// 형용사가 더 어울립니다 . -불만: complaint 불만들: complaints -cannot 붙여서 쓰니다.
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