▶ Your Answer :Although there is no complete consensus that has been reached on the topic. I strongly believe that children should spend their time doing housework. This is because they will have more responsibility on their behavior and they will feel more closeness with their parents.
To begin with, children will be more responsible on their work. They learn responsibility from get in charge of something such as room cleaning or help mom doing household chores. Moreover responsibility is useful in days to come. Studies at Kyeong-gi university have shown that children who helps parents doing house chores are more responsible on their work than who just use time to play and study.
On top of that, they feel more sense of closeness with parents. Spending time doing housework, intimacy between child and parents become tighten than before. Parents appreciate by the fact that children help their work. Children enlighten how difficult parents are by doing work. For example, When iI was seven-teen years old, my friends did o not help their parents doing housework. However, I usually did o household chores with my parents. Naturally, iI learned how tired it is and my parents said y thanks for helping.^Moreover, we talk a lot during cleaning the house. Thus, iI act with my parents like my friends because of having a lot of conversation than my age groups.
To sum up, responsibility rises by doing housework and closeness between child and parents will be increased. In this regard, using their time doing household chores might be better than just playing and study with their friends.
Fair (17) 글자 수 300 미달입니다. 미니멈 글자 수 채우지 못하면 감점됩니다.
첫번째 본문 -본인의 이유에 대한 부연설명과 예시에 대한 설명 보충해주세요. -children 복수이므로 helps-->help
두번째 본문 -대소문자 오류 -문맥상 과거이므로 do-->did, say-->said, 시제 일관되게 일치시켜주는 연습해주세요.
결론 -responsibility 단수이므로 rise-->rises -수동태는 be p.p 따라서, increase-->increased
이유는 둘다 괜찮습니다. 내용 보충해주시고, 문법 오류 개선해주세요. 수고하셨습니다~~
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