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Undoubtedly, college education plays an
important role in people’s lives in many of the places where they work or play.
Some people say that all university students should take basic science courses
even if they do not don’t have plans to work in the field of science, while others do
not. Both sides may have their own reasons to support their opinions. If I
could choose one side, I would say that making university students to take
basic science lectures even if their future job will not won’t be related is beneficial.
There are few reasons as follows.
To start with, having all university students
to learn basic science may help them in job markets. Since modern society is
becoming more competitive and complex, many employers require candidates with
knowledge in various areas. Students will be able to get a chance to accumulate
knowledge in the field they are not professional by taking basic science
courses, and the knowledge will eventually be their strength in job markets. For
example, according to Tokyo University’s research, there was a huge difference
between two university senior groups whose major was business. The first group
consisted of those who only took business class, while the other group was made
up of those who also learned basic science. The research showed that the latter
tended to have higher employment rate than the first group. In particular, they
got higher scores in job interview since they had a lot to say. This implies
that the students’ understanding in science was an attractive factor to the
employers even though the job was not wasn’t related to science.
In addition, if all students are made to
take basic science classes, they will be able to broaden their views than just
taking classes related to their interested field of jobs. When students take
the courses, they will be able to gain new knowledge and be able to communicate
with various students form different majors. This will enable the students to
acknowledge diverse perspectives and understand them. For instance, when I was
a freshman in college, I only took marketing and statistics which were was the
core subjects for my major, business. I often felt like a man of limited scope since
I only met students in the same major and business was all I knew about. However,
I could overcome this feeling by taking basic physics and biology the next
semester. I met friends from other majors and could have in-depth talk about
the subject. I realized that there were a lot of information that I did not didn’t know
about and different values exist. If I had not hadn’t taken that class, I would not wouldn’t have
been able to widen my horizon.
All things considered, the benefits of
making students take science courses even though their plan is not isn’t to work in
field of science far outweigh those of not doing so. All in all, the importance
of knowledge in various fields cannot be overestimated in modern society.
Good (24–30) 서론 -축약형 지양해주세요. don't-->do not, won't-->will not
첫번째 본문 -축약형 지양. wasn't-->was not
두번째 본문 -marketing and statistics 두가지이므로 복수입니다. 따라서 was-->were, subject-->subjects -전공 과목/주요 과목 core subjects 라고 합니다. -축약형 지양해주세요.
결론 -축약형 지양해주세요.
두 본문 다 내용/예시/이유 좋습니다. 언급된 사항들 개선해주세요.
수고하셨습니다~~
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