▶ Your Answer :
Undoubtedly, money can stimulate people to work hard. Some people argue that a teacher’s earnings should be based on his or her students’ performance. They may think that it can make teachers teach their students harder. However, I do not agree with the opinion above. This is because the resources for students can be limited and students can get stress. First of all, students can be provided with limited contents during class. If a teacher’s salary is changed depending on students’ achievement, the teacher would want to give resources related to making students get higher scores such as worksheets. Also, the teacher’s lecture can just focus on the way to get the points of test to get more salaries. As a result, students can be given just limited materials. For instance, I read an article that a student criticized that teachers once provided valuable materials and exciting activities, but now they just gave a lot of worksheets to make them study more. The article writer claimed that teachers struggled for improving their students’ performance after the school decided to give teachers’ earnings based on the students’ performance, making them give out only limited teaching materials. Second, students can feel stressed. A teacher’s earnings based on his or her students’ performance can make the teacher keep compelling their students to study hard to get good grades. Thus, students can be under huge stress to study. For example, I was not interested in studying history because the subject was boring and unrelated to my future job at all. However, after my school decided to provide teachers’ salary depending on their students’ achievement, the history teacher forced me to study history hard continuously. I had to study history more even though I did not want to. Thus, it gave me a lot of stress. To sum up, I believe that a teacher’s earnings should not be based on their students’ achievement. This is because it can make teachers give students narrow materials and students feel stressed.
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