▶ Your Answer :
Some people think that spending
time with a large number of friends is better than with a small number of them.
They may think that it has more advantages to enjoy their lives. However, I do
not agree with the opinion above. This is because by
spending time with a small number of friends, people can save their time
to make a decision and they could have a closer
relationship with friends.
First of all, people can save
their time to decide when they spend their time with one or two friends.
Generally, it takes more time for people to make a decision with a lot of
people because they have many alternatives than less people. On the other hand,
it is easier to decide with less people. For instance, my sister wanted to go
camping with her seven friends. However, they had different ideas about camping
sites and they took a lot of time for deciding the site. Finally, my sister and
her friends could not go camping because they already spent too much time to
make a decision.
Second, people can have a closer
relationship with their friends. When they use their time with less friends,
they can have more conversations with each other. It helps them understand each
other more and makes them have a closer relationship. For example, when I was
in a middle school, I hung out with a large number of friends because I thought
it was more enjoyable. However, after entering a high school, I spent my time
with only a few friends, and it made us have
more conversations. It helped us understand each other more, and since we could
know about each other well, we were able to give beneficial advice to each other. As a result, we could have a closer
relationship. Now, I keep in touch with my high school friends but do
not with middle school friends.
To sum up, I believe that it is
better to spend time with one or two friends than with a large number of
friends. This is because people can save their time to make a decision and they
can have a closer relationship with their friends.
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